Short Story: Manifestation

[This story has been removed for revision and (hopefully) publication. If I’m not able to publish it, it will be returned here!]

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10 thoughts on “Short Story: Manifestation

  1. scatterbrainedseamstress February 1, 2016 / 6:06 AM

    Oh my goodness, Lana, its absolutely amazing!! Love it!

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    • Lana February 1, 2016 / 3:08 PM

      Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it! πŸ˜€

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  2. kbl February 2, 2016 / 9:17 AM

    Oh my gosh! That is amazing! Are you planning to write more or is it like it’s up to reader to decide whether he lives or dies? Either way, I like it! The ending is my absolute favorite part and his reactions to colors – amazing! But, the ending is still my all-time favorite – it just leaves you thinking. Also, I love how this isn’t just a typical story where he turns out being able to fix everything. Finally (I know, this is going on forever), I loved how you were able to tell in so little words – there was no rambling or random details that weren’t even important (like 3 pages of a turtle crossing a road – thanks John Steinbeck)! Overall, brilliant!

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    • Lana February 2, 2016 / 4:26 PM

      Thanks! πŸ˜€ I think I’m just going to end it there, like you said, to leave the reader thinking and sort of let them decide and think about what happened. And I’m glad I didn’t end up rambling about stuff. (You know, I was really tempted to put something in about a turtle crossing the road…just kidding. How’s that reading going, anyway?) And thanks again for your wonderful (and long, heh) comment!

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  3. Rose Lawson February 3, 2016 / 12:29 PM

    Very well written! Some people never get writers block πŸ˜„

    Also, I Joined the Dark Side subscribed.

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    • Lana February 4, 2016 / 4:02 PM

      Thank you! Who, me? Ha, that’s a good one.

      Yay! Thank you so much. Ahhh, welcome. To your right you will find Darth Vader’s gloves, guaranteed to give you +2 damage on your Force Choke. And on your left, that metal rod contains all the force of the Emperor’s lightning powers–I would not suggest you touch that, as no one who has lived to tell the tale. And up ahead is a life-sized plastic statue of Emperor Palpatine for you to strike down so your journey to the Dark Side will be complete.

      Oh, and are you someone from the YWP?

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      • Rose Lawson February 4, 2016 / 4:10 PM

        Yes. I go by Diz the Dizzy on YWP.

        MY JOURNEY TO THE DARKSIDE IS COMPLETED!

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      • Lana February 4, 2016 / 5:40 PM

        Oh, Diz! Hello! πŸ˜€

        YESSSSS WELCOMEEEEE

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  4. queenmelainiemerker February 3, 2016 / 7:09 PM

    WAHT. WAHT. WAHT. OH MY GOSH. NOOOOOOOOOO–
    THIS IS SO SPLENDIFEROUS AND AMAZING AND JUST. WOW. FEELS.

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    • Lana February 4, 2016 / 3:56 PM

      THANK YOU I’M GLAD YOU LIKE IT HEHE

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